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“Where’s Daddy going?”

“Quiet. Mommy’s busy.” The harsh rake of a metal zipper closing. The girl carefully lays her bear on the bed covers, then picks him up again.

“When will he be back?”

“When he’s finished.”

“Finished what?”

“Finished doing what he’s doing.”

“What is he doing?” Her mother pulls the curtains, shutting out the dull, feeble light of the muted sun.

“So many damn questions.” The squeak of the springs as she lifts the heavy suitcase off of the sagging mattress.

“Will he be back for my birthday?” The timid voice questions.

“No.”

“No? But he said he would get me a bike, a blue one, we saw it in the window and he said I could have it for my birthd-”

“No. He won’t be back for your birthday.”

“I’m getting old, aren’t I mommy?” she asks proudly.

“Old? Hell, you’re only six.” A raspy laugh, a smoker’s laugh.

“Seven. Is that old? Are you old?”

“I’m old. I’m real old.” She places her hand in the small of her back and grimaces.

“How old?”

“Too old.”

“How old is too old?”

“Listen, will you just shut your mouth? I’ve got a headache.”

“Sorry.” She gazes at the floor, at the shiny Mary-Janes that are too small on her feet. “When will Daddy come home?”

“I told you, he’ll come home when he’s done. He’ll come home when he’s served his time at the penitentiary.”

“Serving? Like Cinderella?” That raspy laugh again.

“Yeah, Cinderdaddy and his singing mice.”

“Will there be mice?”

“No. No mice.”

“Oh. What’s a pentilenchery?”

“Penitentiary. It’s a jail, kid.”

“Jail? Why is he going there?”

“Why do I even send you to school?” she is quiet for a moment. A windchime sends its empty, lonely call through the morning’s thin air. “He’s going there because he did something against the law.”

“What? What did he do?”

“Too many questions.” The girl is silent, waiting. “He had weed in his car. And he was smoking it while he was driving.”

“Weeds? Like dandelions?”

“Too many questions,” she repeats. Taking the girl’s hand, she opens the door and hauls her through. “Can’t you go anywhere without that stupid bear?”

“Kitty?” The girl asks, surprised.

“Yeah, your bear. You’re so stupid you even named it after the wrong animal.” That laugh, like sandpaper.

“Kitty would be lonely without me.”

She shrugs, looking disgusted. “Run on out to the car. Mommy’s gonna lock the house.” Her feet crunch on the gravel, and Kitty dangles from her hand by one leg, swinging back and forth.

The air is cool and the wind whips the dead leaves into a frenzied dance. She looks up at the sky. It is the color of dishwater, and she can’t see the sun.

The engine turns over a few times before the car finally starts, giving a roar like some prehistoric beast.

“Where’s the chenipentally?”

“What?”

“The jail, where Daddy is.”

“Oh, the penitentiary. It’s up in Springfield.”

“Far away?”

“About a half an hour.”

“Will we visit him?”

“Visit him? If you want to drive.” The girl looks puzzled by this.

“Can I?” She asks doubtfully.

“No! You're only six.”

“Oh,” she says, not bothering to correct her. She presses her face against the window, and it fogs up with her breath. She draws an awkward little heart with her stubby forefinger in the mist. The sky is a sheet of gray, unbroken clouds.

“Mommy, where’s the sun?” Her mother laughs. Krckack, krckack, krckack, wheeze.

“Honey, I haven’t seen it for fifteen years.”
©2007-2009 =stormchylde
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jus a lil story. .__.

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:icondeathinator:
The moral, never have kids, they're annoying!

XD It was cute, definatly fun to read

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Difference between a writer and the insane. One gets paid to tell others about the voices in their head.
:iconstormchylde:
Haha...thanks? XD Wasn't quite the moral I meant to convey, haha. :]

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I would like to be the air that inhabits you for a moment only. I would like to be that unnoticed, and that necessary.
:iconslythesnake:
wat a mean mom she really looks like that type of person who goes with the dad.
very good caracteristics u gave her

keep it up

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if scool were to be fun would no scool be boring

try out my page ~slythesnake
watch me if u want ~slythesnake
:iconrujia-the-lazy:
Omigawd emo!! I wanna slap that lady!! D:<<

I wish I could convery a story through dialogue.. D: I suck at dialogue. Hurr.

Reallyreallygood. Even though its depressing. D: And that lady's a bad mommy.

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I have a buddy.
My buddy's a toad.
He's kind of muddy,
And flat on the road.
But he is my buddy,
My buddy to stay,
Until he peels up, and sails away.
--Jim Davis

~ARVash, you're still my best friend.
:iconstormchylde:
Haha, thanks. I usually suck SO BAD at short stories, but for my final project in creative writing, we had to write ten pieces in one format, so I chose short story. More of my favorites will be posted later, when I'm not so lazy. x.x

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I would like to be the air that inhabits you for a moment only. I would like to be that unnoticed, and that necessary.
:iconstormchylde:
Thank you so much!

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I would like to be the air that inhabits you for a moment only. I would like to be that unnoticed, and that necessary.
:iconkarlabob:
Aw, I like it. The girl is just so innocent, and even though she's a bitch I can sympathize for the mom.
:iconstormchylde:
Thank you. :] You do such a great job of telling me whether or not I protrayed what I wanted, and it's always great to get yor insights. <33 I want you to read everything I write. :glomp:

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I would like to be the air that inhabits you for a moment only. I would like to be that unnoticed, and that necessary.
:iconkarlabob:
You mean I get to read all of the good stuff? YAY!
:iconstormchylde:
WHEE!

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...and the bad stuff, too.

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I would like to be the air that inhabits you for a moment only. I would like to be that unnoticed, and that necessary.

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